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あくまで、かなり限られた自分の英語力的に書ける内容にせざるを得ず、中身は真意と違う時もあります。また、添削の方で文字数制限があるので適宜削ったりしています。原文を載せる勇気はないので、採点済みのほうを載せる小心者。途中のアルファベットは添削時に付けられたチェックです。
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Should there be restrictions to free of speech in some cases?
Should there be restrictions to free of speech in some cases?
I don't believe that there should (A)ever be restrictions to freedom of speech (B)for the following three reasons(C_): we need to protect the right to free expression; we need to understand other people, especially foreigners, and we need to respect freedom of thought.(_C)
(D_)Once the government starts to restrict our right to free expression, a miserable situation will result.(_D) Historically, at the (E)start of war, (F_) governments want the power to limit the speech of citizens.(_F) Recently, many journalists (G_)have disclosed facts that the authorities want to hide, and this helps us to learn about the facts.(_G)
(H_)Secondly, we need to know all people well in order to prevent conflict. (_H) (I_) To understand other people, listening to them speak and hearing their opinions and thoughts is a very effective way. If this becomes illegal, we will lose the chance to get information about what other people are thinking about.(_I)
Finally, (J_)restrictions of free speech tends to have a bad influence on the idea of free thought.(_J) (K_)Everyone has the right to free thought, and to respect this basic right is the duty of developed countries. Free thinking has supported the development of modern society, so we must preserve it.(_K)
For the reasons mentioned above, we must respect (L)freedom of speech.
最初に3つも理由を持ってくるところで:と;を使って列挙せよ、という修正です。
確かに、これは文字数省略になる←
"free speech" → "free thought" → "basic rights"と3つ出てくるような流れにしたかった。
そして、ヘイトスピーチとかは規制していいと思いますが、その辺りは文字数的に断念
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まずはさらっとでも復習する!
いずれ手書きで書いてみる
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あくまで、かなり限られた自分の英語力的に書ける内容にせざるを得ず、中身は真意と違う時もあります。また、添削の方で文字数制限があるので適宜削ったりしています。原文を載せる勇気はないので、採点済みのほうを載せる小心者。途中のアルファベットは添削時に付けられたチェックです。
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topic:5
Should there be restrictions to free of speech in some cases?
Should there be restrictions to free of speech in some cases?
I don't believe that there should (A)ever be restrictions to freedom of speech (B)for the following three reasons(C_): we need to protect the right to free expression; we need to understand other people, especially foreigners, and we need to respect freedom of thought.(_C)
(D_)Once the government starts to restrict our right to free expression, a miserable situation will result.(_D) Historically, at the (E)start of war, (F_) governments want the power to limit the speech of citizens.(_F) Recently, many journalists (G_)have disclosed facts that the authorities want to hide, and this helps us to learn about the facts.(_G)
(H_)Secondly, we need to know all people well in order to prevent conflict. (_H) (I_) To understand other people, listening to them speak and hearing their opinions and thoughts is a very effective way. If this becomes illegal, we will lose the chance to get information about what other people are thinking about.(_I)
Finally, (J_)restrictions of free speech tends to have a bad influence on the idea of free thought.(_J) (K_)Everyone has the right to free thought, and to respect this basic right is the duty of developed countries. Free thinking has supported the development of modern society, so we must preserve it.(_K)
For the reasons mentioned above, we must respect (L)freedom of speech.
最初に3つも理由を持ってくるところで:と;を使って列挙せよ、という修正です。
確かに、これは文字数省略になる←
"free speech" → "free thought" → "basic rights"と3つ出てくるような流れにしたかった。
そして、ヘイトスピーチとかは規制していいと思いますが、その辺りは文字数的に断念
7/30